Sunday, 24 September 2017

A Poem a Day (65): Blackbirds

A flash poem written for JD Mader's 2minutes go writing exercise... several days late, but getting there! 



Blackbirds

Blackbirds cry, shadows streaming across orange-streaked skies,
Scratching verses into the walls of this valley wrapt with echoes –
Their silken patterns criss-cross in shimmering slides of movement,
Flickering dark ghosts between the green, twitching leaves.

Copyright Vickie Johnstone, September 24, 2017

2 comments:

  1. Nice, full of good imagery. If you don't mind a suggestion: You rarely need to use the work "Like" to use a simile. This poem would work just as well without it.

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    1. Hi, thanks for reading and commenting. I take that 'like' on board and I think you're right. Cheers for that thought :)

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